Okay, so I wanted to share some comments from a friend (the awesomely honest Braden Bell) who's critiquing my current wip . . . try not to laugh.
Really, I might take it personal. :)
Braden: "Did the morning threaten to rain?"
My thoughts: Yes, it did. Mornings can threaten, don't you know?
"You are so going to hate me, but can air be morbid?"
YES!!! Air can also be wise, witty, and pretty! Sheesh.
"A lot of people in this chapter are wearing holey jeans and dark t-shirts."
Okay, so you got me on that one.
"You're stretching high school voice to the breaking point."
Yeah, well, someone needs to tell high schoolers they need to broaden their vocabulary.
"Whoaa!!! Okay, you're pulling a serious Suzanne Collins Hunger Games thing here where she just bops the heroine on the head and has her pass out so time can fly by."
Me: What's wrong with that? Hunger Games was a best-selling series! Mmmm . . . maybe because no one passed out in my chapter. :)
YES, whistled!!! What's wrong with that???? . . . . . Okay, so I'll take it out.
"Don't you mean astronomy?"
Maybe, maybe not. You'll never know. Okay, so maybe you will since I should have used "astronomy" instead. Kind of like the other day when I wrote "fairy" instead of "ferry". Woops, my bad. :)
And my favorite comment yet . . .
"Oh poor Matt, you had the misfortune of falling in love with the heroine, but you're not the hero! Sorry buddy."
Yes, poor, poor Matt. But I'm sure there's a girl out there for him somewhere.
And THAT is why I have a critique group. It's also why I love Braden's critiques. :)